Banksy Vs. Robbo

I thought this would be a cool link to share after the move we watched: http://imgur.com/gallery/b4QB2

Homework Tuesday 2.28

1. Read 241-256 in the CW.
2. Then read the assignment sheet for the OP-ED. 
3. Write a list of changes you'd like to see made to this assignment to make it something you could be more engaged in writing. You'll have the opportunity on Thursday to argue for your changes.
4. Optional: Post your RE on the blog tonight.
5. Optional: Comment on someone else's RE tomorrow (Wednesday). Make sure it's not the same person you commented on last time.
6. Optional: Invite a friend, family member, etc to comment on your RE.
7. Optional: Email me the comments before class Thursday. 

Free Write for Tuesday 2/28

1. Invention

• Make a list of 10 things you're passionate about. 
• Read through this list looking for topics that could relate to Missoula, that you want to find out more about, and that could relate to environmental sustainability. 
• Pick three topics

2. Free write 

• Now ask as many questions as you can about each. 
• If you get a solid amount of questions, read back through and star the questions you think will be worth pursuing. 

Home Work Thursday 2/23

1. Review the Reflective Essay (RE) assignment sheet on the blog one last time. 
2. Write a final draft of the RE. 
3. Be ready to turn this in Tuesday with all added materials. Remember, this essay is graded for 25% of your grade, be sure it's your best work. Don't turn it in late.
4. Read Chapter 2 in the Curious Writer and the OP-ED "Abolish the White House Lawn" by Michael Pollan (linked here and two the right).

Free Write for Thursday 2/23

1. Now that you've got a complete draft of your essay, have a go (or another go) at your conclusion and intro. Try a paragraph for each.

• Try employing a metaphor for the main point or theme of your essay. 
• Tell a story that is vivid and honest to pull a reader in.
• Make an impassioned appeal to your reader to change to do something. 
• Summarize what you've told us, but try to use concrete images rather than abstract ideas to do it.
• Paint a vivid picture about what you're talking about.
• Reveal an honest and or startling fact about yourself your reader might be surprised to know. 
• Narrate your thinking and how it has changed in the process of writing the paper. Be sure to ask any lingering questions, or any questions that pushed you forward. Describe the places you were in as you pondered these questions.

Try these as both your introductions and conclusions. Sometimes what you thought would be good for one turns out to be great for the other. 

Workshop Guidelines for Reflective Essay Thursday 2/23

This is a complete draft workshop. We need to provide each other with criticism that will get us to a polished final draft.

• Author, remain silent and take notes while your partners discuss your essay. Once they're finished, ask questions. Otherwise hold your tongue. If you feel like they aren't understanding or are missing the point of your essay, write down your questions but ask yourself: did I really convey that in the writing, or did I simply think I had?
• Start with questions of direction and scope and move into structure and then line edits. For each author write your top 3 suggestions for revision at the top of their essay. 

1. Summarize the draft as it stands. If this is unclear, the author needs to work to find a thread or purpose. Try and help them articulate what interests them about the topic. Maybe they disagree with the concepts, how can they disagree and still address the requirements of the assignment? What could the underlying purpose be? Be sure to have a discussion with them at the end of their session to find questions they can get excited about. 
2. Discuss whether or not the essay is engaged with the ideas of writing as a process and describes writing with in an instituitional standard. Does the author describe their own experiences of writing for school? For a grade? Do they match that with writing outside of school?  Does the author take risks and engage the reader, or is the essay feeling uninspired (in which case they might consider taking a new track)?
3. Discuss the structure of the essay. Does one section progress to another? Does it keep you interested, even on successive readings? What if the author started on the last paragraph or ended on the first? Do they need to take another crack at the intro or conclusion? Try reverse outlining by summarizing each paragraph and then describing the points made to lead to an outline of the essay. Can anything be moved around in the outline, cut, or filled out?
4. Is the essay on track to meet the criteria of the assignment? Does it discuss the authors ideas and reflections on writing? Is the author in pursuit of wisdom and asking questions; looking for answers to why more than they are for what or how?
5. Do you lose interest at any point? Should the author scrap sections of the essay and go in a new direction? If so, be clear about what should remain.
6. Go over the essay line by line, checking the grammar, citations, cutting for more concise language, transitions, spelling, etc. A good way to do this is to read it out loud. You can also focus a paragraph or single section of the essay to point out larger problems. Only spend time on this if you've gone through the rest of the essay and found relatively few problems. Before "finalizing" your draft to turn it to me, you should read it out loud or have someone read it to you.
7. Discuss the essay with the author and answer any questions.

Free Write for Tuesday 2/21

1. See if you can tie sustainability into your essay. Explore what writing does in this world, what it means to engage with the wider discourse, and maybe think about if anything you've read has made you want to be more sustainable. Make a list of questions about whether anything you've read has changed your point of view, why, and if we can expect writing on sustainability to have enough impact to actually produce a change in our society.

Home Work Tuesday 2/21

• Review the Reflective Essay (RE) assignment sheet on the blog. 
• Write a complete draft of the RE. 
• Email copies to me and your peers Wednesday by 5. 
• Print and prepare comments for workshop by offering line edits and 3 ideas for revision on the essay. Ask questions and give specific revision ideas about direction. 
• Be sure the essay follows the scope of the assignment by:

1. Discussing the author's history of writing (reflecting on if they consider themselves a writer and why).
2. Discussing the institutionalized space that informs that history (if the institutions they have been taught to write in affect their opinion on themselves as a writer).
3. Reflecting on their work in this class (does this class diverge from or maintain the standards of their past, using specific examples of their own process in comparison to their process in the past)/
4. Reflecting on what writing does, and if they feel they can engage in a wider discourse.
5. Relating that wider discourse the task of becoming a sustainable society.

Home Work Thursday 2/16

1. Read John Taylor Gatto's article "Against School". 
2. Review the updated reflected essay assignment. 
3. Make a list of 10 questions you'd like to explore in terms of your writing. 
4. Then either revise the free-write from today or start fresh on a rough draft of your reflective essay. Think about the way in which institutional learning has played into your development as a writer as well as your work in this course. In 300-500 words explore your history of writing in the larger context, your emerging writing process and discuss this courses roll in the continuation and disruption of the commodification of writing. Allow your questions to inform and guide you.
5. Email me and your partners your rough draft by Sunday at 5 PM along with your questions. 
6. Read through your partners' rough drafts and come up with 2-3 ideas for revision. Email me this list of ideas before class on Tuesday. 
7. By class Thursday skim "Street Art". Be ready to discuss in class. 

Free Write for Thursday 2/16

1. Think about your personal history with writing.  How long have you been writing? Do you see yourself as a writer? Why or why not? What sort of writing have you gotten excited about in the past? In primary and secondary school as well as any other institutions, what kind of writing were you expected to do? What have you been taught about writing? Why do you think you write the way you do and has any of your thinking about writing changed in this class?

Watch Out!

life place

Shayleen O’Hayre

Writ 101 spring 2012

Mackenzie Cole

Life Place Essay

5 February 2012   

From big to small quickly

 My home is a place, Boulder, Colorado,  filled with many people going all the time, in their fancy shirts or shoes or just a simple T-shirt and shorts, they never stop to look at all the things that are around them the Rocky Mountains or the campus of students, they all seem to be laughing and smiling at everything and anything.

Forging Connections

Forging Connections

            What makes a person connected to their bioregion? Is it the natural beauty of the landscape? Is it the variety of flora and fauna? Or is it simply the length of time that someone lives in an area that creates these connections? These seem to be the most obvious answers that come to mind when thinking of bioregionalism, but for me the answer is more complicated and still at least partially unresolved.

            The convergence of the Blackfoot, Clark Fork and Bitterroot rivers forms the foundation of Missoula’s vibrant Rocky Mountain ecosystem. Nestled in the river valley, Missoula also rests at the convergence of five mountain ranges. More than just being the economic hub of Western Montana, Missoula is a regional environmental hub. As I have only lived here for eight months, my connections to this environment are limited but growing. 

Sam Smith Life Place Essay

Sam Smith

Life Place Essay Final Draft

An Ocean Runs Through Me

Just beyond the winding path of eucalyptus trees lies my favorite place: a dark cave filled with drift wood, kelp, and old beaten up shells lies one of my favorite places. Santa Cruz is just a short paddle from the cave. Santa Cruz is well known for its tourist attractions, such as the board walk and long stretches of beaches filled with boogie boarders, small giggling children, and honeymooners. 

But my favorite place is tucked away far enough that some local’s still don’t know about it. I grew up here, with family and friends, laughing and surfing. We call it Johnson’s Beach in memory of a good friend that unfortunately passed due to cancer six years back. Steve Johnson was an incredibly talented surfer who taught me everything I know. Not only was he good at surfing but he was also a fantastic person and one of my biggest role models. The beach is rather hard to get to; in order to reach its soft, sandy, wave beaten shores, you must climb down a steep cliff to get inside of my sea cave. 

Kristian Stipe

On Top of the World

Standing on top of the world is an experience few get to experience. I am one of those lucky few to have found a couple places where I am King of all the land, or at least that’s what it feels like. One such place is a stunning, 35 foot cliff covered in alabaster white snow, with the smell of pine wafting up to your nostrils every few minutes. When you are on top of the cliff you feel invincible, looking out onto the valley, until you look down and realize you are on top of a ledge that would mean almost certain death if you fell off. I found this cliff with a friend of mine, one day while we were skiing on Big Mountain. It is pretty hard to get to and even harder to get back to. Most of the time you end up at the bottom of it without realizing you missed it. If you don’t know where you are going you usually don’t make it to the top.

Conference Schedule

Mackenzie Cole

Writ 101.28 Sustainability

Spring 2012

Conferences

Time	Mon 2/13 Cor 254	Tues 2/14 Cor 254	Wed 2/15 Cor 254	Thurs 2/16 Cor 254
2:00-2:30	NO CONFERENCES	Name: AnnaLeigh	Name: Jessie M.	Name: Jess N.
2:40-3:10	NO CONFERENCES	Name: Briana	Name:	Name: Kristian
3:20-3:50	Name: Scott S.	Name: Gordo	NO CONFERENCES	NO CONFERENCES
4:00-4:30	Name: ACEA	Name: Haley	NO CONFERENCES	NO CONFERENCES
4:40-5:10	Name: Nicholas	Name: Sam	NO CONFERENCES	NO CONFERENCES
5:10-5:40	Name: Victor	Name: Dayle	NO CONFERENCES	Name: Shayleen
5:50-6:20	Name: Clayton	Name: Loni	NO CONFERENCES	NO CONFERENCES
6:30-7:00	Name: Matt	Name: Mac	NO CONFERENCES	NO CONFERENCES

REMINDER: ARRIVE 5 MINUTES EARLY!

NO OFFICE HOURS DURING CONFERENCES, NO CLASS TUESDAY THE 14!

clayton's essay

Clayton Improta

Life place essay #1

Writ 101 Mackenzie Cole

Sun, Snow and Led Zepplin

                Many memories pass through my mind when I think of my hometown of Missoula, MT. Many people think of Montana as a backwoods state, with more trees and mountains than people, or maybe they think it’s a part of Canada. And yes, I have been asked if I am Canadian. Missoula has many amazing things to offer because of this isolated and natural wilderness. I have been thrust into the outdoors by my parents my entire childhood, and whether I like it or not the wilderness around me has become more familiar and home-like. I often think back and remember some of my favorite spots.

Eco Foot Print Quiz

http://myfootprint.org/

When stone meets sky

White water kayaking is the core of my life. It judges what decisions I make as to where I go, when I go there, and for what reason. There is no other place I would like to be than deep in a canyon in my kayak, or paddling an alpine creek. When there are rivers everywhere it seems impossible to have just one life-place. Every new canyon, river, mountain and hill has new views, new feels, and a different attitude. That is what I like about each new place

Free Write for Thursday 2/9

1. What did you learn writing your Life Place essay? 

• Did you discover anything new about yourself? About Missoula? About sustainability? 
• Has your thinking developed or changed? 
• Did you learn anything about writing or the process of writing? 
• How is your writing process emerging? 
• Is there anything you'll try and do differently for the next essay?

Home Work Thursday 2/9

Remember, no class Tuesday, but DO NOT MISS your conference.

Read the Reflection Essay assignment sheet. Read the two example reflective essays. Read the CW Ch. 1, 3-39 and review the syllabus on the blog. Be ready to discuss those readings Thursday or take a quiz on them. 

By Saturday at 5 PM: pick one Life Place essay on the blog you haven't read yet. Read and comment on the essay with a thoughtful response to the content.  

Then link to your essay on another website. You could link from Facebook, another article on the internet that has something similar to do with your essay, the Independent, or a blog. Lastly, find one person, a parent, a friend, a long lost cousin, and ask them to read your comment online and right a brief response. 

Before class Thursday email me: this comment, your comment on another LP and the url of the link to your post.

Be sure to bring a notebook and a pen to take notes on our conferences. 

Jessie's Life Place

What Will Happen to the Wolverine?

Somewhere in the Rocky Mountains, a wolverine is burrowed 10 feet under the snow.  His body heat is warming the snow around him, and in his icy sanctuary, he stays warm enough to survive another winter.  Some of the snow below him melts and seeps into the earth.  A quarter mile away a fresh water spring bubbles up as the soil can’t hold any more snow melt.

Life Place Essay

Dayle Walters
02/09/12
Writ 101
Mackenzie Cole
Final Draft: Life Place Essay
                                                                     Silence in Noise
 
        My hometown is very different from Missoula. Seattle does not use de-icier.  Two thousand,

three hundred and sixty accidents in a twenty four hour period (1). That’s roughly one and half

accidents a minute. Statistics like that meant I never learned to drive in the snow. Missoula has better

snow drivers than Seattle, but there aren’t as many hills to skid down here. Coming to live in

Missoula was like sliding down a massive hill backwards with no de-icier. I was scared by what

might happen during this time and hesitant that I would eventually be able to get back to normal.

Life Place Essay Final Draft

                                                               Take a Breath, Man

          I’ve never considered where I am, and by that I mean; really where I am. My area, my life place; in another life my Area of Responsibility. Things are different now. Now I’m in college and besides an assignment with ‘life place ‘ as the theme I’m being asked something new: how I feel about something. Not just that; but how it engages me, how it involves me. Wow, take a breath. Simple for some, very different for me.

Life Place Essay

Annaleigh Newall

Writ. 101

Mackenzie Cole

Life Place Essay

To Find Mount Vernon I Went to Missoula

As I sit writing this essay, I am able to reflect on the past eighteen years of my life. I look out the window and see the snow dusted mountains everywhere I look, the cars flying by on the highway and over the Clark Fork Bridge. As I stare in amazement at the beauty surrounding me, I am brought back to why I chose to continue my schooling in Missoula, Montana. A place where it is rumored that horses are more abundant than cars and Indians are on the loose everywhere, and of course, does anyone actually live there?

Briana's Life Place Essay

Briana De La Chance
Life Place Essay
Final Draft
02.09.12

                                                         Oh The Places I Have Been…        

 Though Missoula is my “home”, I have always wanted a change— something more. After years of feeling stuck here I decided to try to find things I liked about Missoula. I started getting out more, mostly I spent more time in Missoula’s wilderness.  I have grown to love Missoula for its trees, rivers, and mountains. I find solace in getting lost in the wilderness all around us. This town hasn’t always an easy place for me to live. After living here for most of my life the size of Missoula caught up with me. It is far too small to get away with anything. I hate that about Missoula and sometimes, yearn to get away. I used to tell my mother I wanted to live somewhere I could go to the same coffee shop every day and have no one remember me. A place I could disappear into. Missoula has become this in a sense, but in a different way. I can go for a hike and get lost for hours, but there at the end of the day I have those who love me to come home to. I spend a lot of time these days trying to figure out what I want from life. I wonder where my life should take me and where it no longer can, and what kind of life I want to have for my son, Paxton.

Nicholas McClure's Life Place Essay

          

Nicholas McClure

2/9/12                                              Eagle Eye View

I am hovering over the trees, having full vision of the hills and mountains that engulf me from below. The mountains are endless, and the view of the Willoughby Lake is clearer than ever before. A pattern of faded mountain peaks in the background complete the scenic view. There is no way you could be upset while looking out upon this picture frame view. A view of Vermont on all four sides of this floating wooden box. Green for as long as my eyes can see. I am an eagle on a watch tower. My vision is focused on the lake and the mountains that surround it. Hidden, untouched, vegetation infested ponds hide in the center of the woods that I look down on. I feel as if I were god looking down on the beauty of his own creation.

Haley Shovlin Life-Place Essay

Haley Shovlin

Life-Place Essay

2/5/12

No Longer A City-Slicker

Coming to Missoula was definitely not my first choice, with the cold weather, no experience in skiing and knowing very few people here. My intention was to go to UCLA, where the days would shine bright, the sun would call my name as my last class ends and the upbeat town keeps me busy at all times. At no point did I see myself shaking in the 4 degree weather as I trudge through a foot of snow to attend a 50 minute class, only to do the same all the way back to the dorm. This being said, my bioregion has now become Missoula, Montana, seeing as it has claimed my heart.

mac adams life place essay

Mac Adams

Writ 101 Spring 2012

2/8/12

Life Place Essay

130 Miles On 93

My new life place, and also my bioregion, is the quiet but busy valley of Missoula, Mt. I haven't had much time to explore my new surroundings. This new bioregion hasn’t fully set in yet. I would not consider this my native bioregion it isn’t where I was born and it certainly isn’t where I have spent the majority of my life. This new bioregion I call home has been limited by the amount of time I have spent here. This however couldn't be farther from the truth when it comes to my hometown of Whitefish, Montana I know this place very well.  I am looking forward to further exploring this new valley I live in which in many ways you could call a close relative of my native bioregion two hours up the highway.

Victor's Life Place Essay

Out With the Old, In With the New

In the smeared rear view mirror of my car, Big Mountain vaguely skewed itself from my vision as I trudged my car down the unplowed highway. The runs grew smaller and smaller until I could barely see green and white patches sprawled across the face of the mountainside. The city lights were no longer illuminating the road as I exited the city limits of Whitefish, Montana. The close knit community and the friendliness that was spread through the town made for a great place to grow up as a kid. I was no longer a child anymore, at 19 years of age. I didn’t look like a child obviously, but I still had the mindset of a toddler. I had to grow up on a snowy day in January and make my way to Missoula, Montana. College life sounded so appealing to me growing up, as I had dreams of being a physical therapist and watched a few too many shows on MTV about college kids partying like rock stars.

Free Write for Tuesday 2/7

1. 

• What questions have you pursued in your life place essay? 
• What has been the most difficult part of the process for writing this paper? 
• What can you do to change that for the next paper you write?  
• What do you need to do to have a final draft by Friday? 
• How are you feeling about your role in this class so far? 
• Write 3 new questions you could pursue in your essay. 

2. Read the handout on surrealism and then describe a piece of the landscape allowing your subconscious to speak to it's purpose. 

Home Work Tuesday 2/7

• Review the Life Place Essay Assignment Sheet and then revise your complete draft into a final draft. 
• This should be 1000 words, have a title and heading, be double spaced. 
• Include all elements required on the assignment sheet: 

1. one piece of invention (for example a free write); 
2. one previous drafting; 
3. a letter or draft from workshop with peer comments that influenced your writing; 
4. a brief one paragraph description of your process for revision.

• Before class on Thursday, post your Life Place essay on the blog. 

Workshop Guide for the Complete Life Place Essay 2/7

This is a complete draft workshop. We need to provide each other with criticism that will get us to a polished final draft.

Author, remain silent and take notes while your partners discuss your essay. Once they're finished, ask questions. Otherwise hold your tongue. If you feel like they aren't understanding or are missing the point of your essay, write down your questions but ask yourself: did I really convey that in the writing, or did I simply think I had?

Start with questions of direction and scope and move into structure and then line edits. For each author write your top 3 suggestions for revision at the top of their essay along with 3 questions about the substance of the essay (for example, why do you care about this topic? What did you learn from writing this essay?) You can't use the two questions I just gave you as examples, but you should consider them for your own essay in revision. 

1. Summarize the draft as it stands. Paraphrase the essay, paragraph by paragraph. If this is unclear, the author needs to work to find a thread or purpose. Try and help them articulate what interests them about the topic. Maybe they disagree with the concepts, how can they disagree and still address the requirements of the assignment? What could the underlying purpose be? Be sure to have a discussion with them at the end of their session to find questions they can get excited about. 
2. Discuss whether or not the essay is engaged with the ideas of bioregionalism. Does place play a central role? Does the author describe a way in which a bioregion has had a major impact on their purpose and life? If not, how could they? 
3. Discuss the structure of the essay. Does one section progress to another? Does it keep you interested, even on successive readings? What if the author started on the last paragraph or ended on the first? Do they need to take another crack at the intro or conclusion? Try reverse outlining by summarizing each paragraph and then describing the points made to lead to an outline of the essay. Can anything be moved around in the outline, cut, or filled out?
4. Is the essay on track to meet the criteria of the assignment? Does it discuss Missoula as a bioregion? Is the author in pursuit of wisdom; looking for answers to why more than they are for what or how? Does the author take risks and engage the reader, or is the essay feeling uninspired (in which case they might consider taking a new track)?
5. Do you lose interest at any point? Should the author scrap sections of the essay and go in a new direction? If so, be clear about what should remain.
6. Go over the essay line by line, checking the grammar, citations, cutting for more concise language, transitions, spelling, etc. A good way to do this is to read it out loud. You can also focus a paragraph or single section of the essay to point out larger problems. Only spend time on this if you've gone through the rest of the essay and found relatively few problems. Before "finalizing" your draft to turn it to me, you should read it out loud or have someone read it to you.
7. Discuss the essay with the author and answer any questions.
8. Write down two things you learned because of this essay to share at the end of class. 

*UPDATED* Revision Ideas

Based on your workshop discussion, begin revising your essays into complete drafts. If you get stuck:

• Don't forget you have resources in the CW 106-113 to help you.
• Work in 15 minute increments, then take a 15 minute break. 
• Practice different modes of writing: for 10 minutes generate, for 10 minutes be critical and cut, for 10 minutes research, for ten minutes work on structure, etc. 
• Get up and pace around or do a free write. Moving your body has been shown to help you think better!
• Try and out-line your essay to see if that structure can propell you forward
• Write your essay out again word for word in a new document. Allow yourself to make changes as you go. You'll be surprised at the things you notice you want to change.
• Head in a totally new direction. If you're talking about the time you walked up the Rattlesnake, talk about the time you went on a hike somewhere else, or the difference of walking in the mall.
• Write a story about your thinking concerning bioregionalism and how it has changed.
• Speak to the concepts of bioregionalism.

UDWPA question

Read this passage from Derrick Jensen's a Language Older Than Words. In 750 words respond: Jensen posits there is another method of communication we are all intrinsically familiar with. Describe this language using your own words and experience and discuss how silencing that language might affect your ability to live sustainably.

Workshop Guide

Remember: this is a rough draft. We don't need to discuss final draft details. Don't get bogged down in grammar or in structure unless the problems are huge, i.e. preventing you from discerning meaning. 

Author, remain silent and take notes while your partners discuss your essay. Once they're finished, ask questions. Otherwise hold your tongue. If you feel like they aren't understanding or are missing the point of your essay, write down your questions but ask yourself: did I really convey that in the writing, or did I simply think I had?

Focus on questions of direction and scope. For each draft do the following: 

>Summarize the draft as it stands. Paraphrase the main point of the essay. If this is unclear, the author needs to work to find a thread or purpose. Try and help them articulate what interests them about the topic. Maybe they disagree with the concepts, how can they disagree and still address the requirements of the assignment? What could the underlying purpose be? 

>Is the author writing for their own discovery, or simply because they were assigned to write an essay? Suggest possibilities to become more engaged in the question bioregionalism. 

>Ask yourself: is this essay too big? Trying to do too much? Would it take a book to really address this issue?  

>Is the essay on track to meet the criteria of the assignment? Does it discuss Missoula as a bioregion? Is the author in pursuit of wisdom; looking for answers to why more than what or how? Does the author take risks and engage the reader, or is the essay feeling uninspired (in which case they might consider taking a new track).

>Do I lose interest at any point? Should the author scrap sections of the essay and go in a new direction? If so, be clear about what should remain.

>End off on a high note: what did you enjoy?

Free Write for Thursday 2/2

1. Write for 5 minutes, stream of conscious, about anything you like. Try and get yourself in a flow, no pausing, as fast as you can. Kill your editor and produce.

2. Write as many introductions to your essay as you can with the remaining time. Get at least two intro paragraphs out. Try and grab the reader by the face with your first sentence. Some directions you might take:

1. Describe how where you are in terms of ecology has to do with who you are, your purpose.

2. Ask questions you hope to explore in your essay, then start to explore the most compelling ones.

3. You could also try and describe the areas you're talking about with a metaphor or simile: for example, describe the landscape as a person; what kind of person might it be?

4. Try and employ images. For every abstract thing you discuss, tie it to a specific vivid image. 

5. Ask questions of what you've written so far. 

6. Describe or narrate your emerging thinking on life place. EX: At first the concept of a bioregion, of life place, was foreign to me. I asked myself why should the bioregion I live in have anything to do with how I live? But then I was walking to school and stopped to watch a squirrel digging in the snow… 

Homework Thursday 2/2

Revise your rough draft into a complete draft. 

• This should be at least 1000 words, but preferably longer. 

By Sunday at 5PM email me and your partners your complete draft. 

• Please double space, include a heading and a title. The heading should have your name, the assignment, complete draft, and the date. 
• Review all of chapter 14 in the CW. Once you have your partners' drafts, print them off, read them, and use the discussion in Chapter 14 to guide your response. 

Write a letter to the author concerning revision (at least one page, no more than two): 

• Start with scope: is this a life place essay? If so then move on to more localized edits. If grammatical issues pop up, be sure to address them. Make sure bioregionalism is discussed and that Missoula plays a role. 
• Review the assignment sheet and make sure the essay hits all points outlined there. 
• If the essay seems strong, think about how it could be stronger. Does the introduction grip you? Does the conclusion leave you feeling complete? Would one section be a stronger start or ending? Would research bolster the authority of the author or provide a means to new leaps in understanding?  
• Be sure to offer edits on the draft suggesting line edits, structural changes, and marking out which parts are engaging and which lose your interest. These points don't need to show up in your letter, but should be prepared for class. 

Email this letter to me before class on Tuesday.